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Beckaney
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PostSubject: Light Hearted Saviour   Wed Feb 21, 2007 6:00 pm

You come at me within a whisper of a word
With the kindness that no voice can ever speak
And a love in which no words can ever know
And a friendship like none other that has been made

Holding out your hands you set me free
Inviting me into your heart you showed me safety
Sharing of your wisdom you gave me strength
Listening of my pains you helped me see

Tarnished was my name till you were there
Blackened was my heart till you gave it colour
Saddened was my mind till you gave it hope
Ravished was my soul till you gave me life

When the nights were ever so cold and bitter
You held me in your heart and warmed me by your fire
When my soul was covered in a haze
You became my eyes so I could still see

You show your feelings for me in a little box
With the paintings of your heart filled words
You give me hope of new beginnings untold
And prove to me there is light no matter the suffrage

With you standing there right by my side
I know that even in the darkest hour there is light
And I can overcome these vile heart wrenching words
And that the darkness will never drag my spirit down



:face: Beckaney


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PostSubject: Re: Light Hearted Saviour   Wed Feb 21, 2007 6:07 pm

Ah, a much lighter piece. My only complaint is the font size. I have mixed feelings because I like the smaller font but it is a little hard on the eyes.

But, its very good. You're very talented I must say.
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PostSubject: Re: Light Hearted Saviour   Wed Feb 21, 2007 6:11 pm

Ah yes yes I see. I will fix the font size up just for you....lol

I didn't actually remember to adjust the font size this time round. But I am glad you think it is good.

Thankyou for taking the time to read and comment my work.

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PostSubject: Re: Light Hearted Saviour   Wed Feb 21, 2007 10:03 pm

...im awe struck on this piece like really i loved it all crazy awsome job there! cheers
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PostSubject: Re: Light Hearted Saviour   Wed Feb 21, 2007 10:38 pm

aaaaawwwwwww thankyou so much Kite Shield

I really appreciate your comments.


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